Azila

Much better now! Just make sure you add in some description of her background in chapters to come! (it could even be something like: 'I hadn't realized until now how ...

When I'm bored, I go on the YWS... the highest I've gotten is 2,480. But I've learned some pretty cool words! Choco: that's amazing. You mush know some neat words ...

Thanks for the review, Ayra! To tell you the truth I'd almost forgotten about this piece. :oops: So thanks for bringing it back to my attention. Your suggestion about the ...

I don't like Deuce as much as Tala, Wenonah or Talulah... but you're the author of course... and I know how it feels to be attached to a name. Maybe ...

I really liked this. Honest. I actually thought that the italics added to it. I just suggest you make this part one line: but not the same; The other place ...

Very nice! It seems very promising. In the future (when you're posting longer things) I think you should post in the Literary Forums. And also make sure that your story ...

Hi there Helen! Welcome to the YWS!! It's an awesome site and I'm sure you will get along with everyone here. As for tips and friendly advice: I recommend you ...

please tell me its not too horrible! You have to be kidding. This was awesome! (as usual) About the nothing happening: I think that's good. The whole story can't be ...

Phew! *wipes brow* I was getting worried, I thought I was in trouble. :P ~Azila~

(aka posting a topic that already the way, anyone who hasn't heard by now go to freerice.com). Oh... I feel so bad now. :( I really didn't realize, my mother ...

I'll make some changes...maybe I'll submit a revised-revised edition? :P Actually, I think that you should just edit this and put something like 'latest version' in the subtitle. Anyway, I'm ...

Welcome, Stephanie! This is the greatest site in the world (and quite addictive too, I might add...) so I'm sure you'll love it here. Everyone is nice and friendly and ...

Haha, I think this is officially the third time this has been posted in the past three weeks. It's a cool site, indeed. :oops: Sorry! I hadn't realized... I usually ...

I don't know how this works but it's an awesome site. ~Azila~

Hi! Welcome to the one and only YWS! I'm not a poetry expert, but you can still PM me if you aren't getting reviews and I'll give you one. Also, ...