Azila

Wow, this is really cool! The idea is a little unsettling, but very neat in deed. And the whole thing you did with switching the narration is done very well ...

Well... everyone else above me has already said it, I think... do remember that all points are always reset to 500 every week. Welcome to the YWS! Please PM me ...

Hi Aquatica! (I like that nickname too... sounds so mysterious and regal!!) No... you definitely didn't ramble too much. It's good to talk about yourself here --this is YOUR thread, ...

Thanks for the review, Pawprint... it was encouraging, but sadly it wasn't brutal. Anyone gonna give me a brutal review? PLEASE? ~Azila~

Thank you so much for reviewing this! It's actually supposed to be a cat, not a dog, but looking back I guess it can be uninterpreted either way. Thanks again! ...

Hiya Rubric! The YWS is my first Forum experience as well, and it gas been awesome. It took a little time to get used to but after that... well... it's ...

This is a pretty nice little piece of fiction! Of course, it was too short to really critique in full, but here are my thoughts: The writing style is very ...

I am woken from a light sleep as a small red creature of some sort whizzes across the room. I open one eye to observe the creature; it appears to ...

Thanks for the advise, Chimpy. I kinda like the idea of making the sentences reflect the storm itself... but I also like the formatting as it is. :twisted: I will ...

That was really sweet! I don't have anything to crit. :lol: For some reason, the italics weren't italicised (they just showed [ i ] or [ / i ] only ...

I'm going to be entering this into a competition by the 1st of January. Please be brutal, I can take it. :wink: ~Azila~

This is really good! I finally have that explanation of background that I've been pining for for the last few chapters. :twisted: Well this is great, the whole day with ...

This is really nice, Ayra! Even though (as others have already said) the whole thing with the mother leaving is a bit vague, the story on the whole is really ...

Gosh, I'm really behind on this. I've been really busy the last few weeks. I don't have much to say (except the usual: WE NEED MORE OF CODEN'S BACKGROUND!!). This ...

As has already been said, this is really too short to critique. I know you don't want to post something TOOO long because people might get bored reading it, but ...