Azila

This is really neat. I will have to go give stars to all those great pieces that I haven't gotten around to yet. ^_^ Thank you so much... ~Azila~

It's better now. However, this date... was just going to say that this day was special (which it is). Thanks for your opinion! But you go on to say that ...

I agree with Wolf and Saint Razorblade--there really isn't any character development. Why don't the "catty" girls let her into their circle? Just because she's not popular? Or is there ...

This made me laugh. Though some might say that the opening paragraph is too silly/boring/repetitive/whatever, I liked it. Great opening. :wink: There really isn't enough to critique, but I will ...

The face is really cute. The eyes are perfect--very anime. The hair is also really good, although I think it could use to be thickened up towards her neck. If ...

Thanks you all so much for your awesome crits! I haven't had time to edit this yet, but hopefully I will get one later in the week. Thanks again! ~Azila~

Alright, I'm a little desperate. Penelope (my entry for Cal's new contest) can use a review. I feel bad begging though... I'll pay you back. Just tell me what you ...

I noticed that there is a little spot down at the bottom that gives the name of the newest registered member, is there is a list somewhere that shows you ...

This was really good! The emotion is masterful... I especially liked the part about the warriors of sadness. ^_^ Nor are there really any major mistakes. Repetition is much better ...

Hm... I kind of get the feeling she doesn't have to try. :P ~Azila~

Instructor Purple! (because we seem to be going through a purple faze...) ~Azila~

This is really good! The descriptions are quite vivid and the writing is effectively emotional without overdoing it. Congratulations! Just a few little suggestions... A pounding, like the impossible b

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Hmm...try checking out YWS's new Random Name Generator! ~A~

I've only written Sci-fi once (and that...well... let's just say I wrote it a long time ago and it was really just an experiment in present tense. XD) Anyway, as ...