Azila

I agree with the others; this is a little confusing and unclear. There are also a few grammatical and rhythmical problems that I have fixed (and underlined) in the version ...

I have the same problem. ALL THE TIME. I think maybe if you start with writing short stories, then gradually get longer and longer, that might work... maybe. I don't ...

1. I (like Saint) like the abandoned structure here. The water in the background and the brush in the foreground give a very immersed-in-nature type feel. 2. Again, the immersed ...

I agree with Cassandra: this really doesn't fit in this forum. You should PM a mod to have it moved to Non-Fiction, Other, the Debate Group... or something. Just don't ...

The first one is really cool. I love the silhouetted trees and wires! This would work really well as a wallpaper. But I would like to see the top of ...

These are all really amazing! I love pictures of graffiti... where do you find so much of it?! :lol: 1. This one is really nice. I like the blank (or ...

No, I didn't mean to yell at you! I was just... surprised? I guess it's not what I was expecting and therefore caught me off guard. I think it is ...

I don't do that, and I don't think I would be inclined to. I'm not saying that it can't work for you, but I don't think it would work for ...

Umm... okay, then. :lol: This is really funny, but do you really want brutal reviews on it? Do you really want us to tear apart each and every word choice? ...

This is pretty good! the emotion was very well done and for the most part, there aren't that many errors. One main thing: All dialogue needs to be punctuated. For ...

This is really good! I love the shading and how her hair catches the light. Feet: Not only are they too wide, but they both look the same. :? I ...

I added some more advise about repetition, by the way. I'm glad to see that this is helping people! :D ~Azila~

This was interesting. Like Suzanne said, you should add some more description because I don't really have any mental picture of the scene. What do the characters look like? What ...

I have to admit, I didn't read this. :oops: That's because it's all one big block of text. You need to break it up! For example... NO: Personal expression, to ...

This has a simplistic, childish, fairy-tale type feel, but I think that's what you're going for, so I won't pester you about it. ^_^ She wasn't a very smart chicken. ...