Azila

Hi there! Nitpicks first... She was elusive. Always quiet and eyes trained on whatever new book had caught her eye this week. I suggest you make the period (after "elusive") ...

Hi there, and welcome to the YWS! Nitpicks first... The trampoline squeaked as Payton jumped, up to the sky. There shouldn't be a comma after "jumped." ^_~ The birds were ...

I like the splotchy-effect of the second one (as does everyone else, apparently ^_^). But they all seem a little bit... surreal. One thing, (the major thing in my opinion) ...

Haha! These are hilarious. ^_^

Shucks! I had so many good line-by-line "correct the flow" type nitpicks. Oh well, that's not what you want. Why don't I answer your questions instead? 1) Are the characters ...

Actually, they are beautiful. ^.^ In a kind of terrifying way, I mean. But I guess I should work on making that clearer? =P Yes, you should make that clearer! ...

Hi, Camille! I'm here as per request... though I was going to come anyway. ^_^ I started this when you didn't have any reviews yet, so if I repeat stuff ...

Hey, Kitty! (I hope you don't mind being called that--I like it as a name, and since your name is kitty15... well, anyway, let's get on to the critique. ^_^) ...

Hey there, Pickle! Nitpicks first... The man is rough, strong, his fingernails filthy, his eyes like stone, or iron. This is a little awkward... I suggest you put in an ...

The whole living alone with him half the year: because the parents would be divorced, and the father would get half custody. :P (well, every other weekend, two weeks in ...

Hello! I'm really glad to see another story about this character, and I think that this prompt or competition (or whatever it is) about writing 100 stories about one character ...

Shouldn't this one be in the Lounge as well? 1=No clue... 2=Once. 3=Lunch and dinner 4=Um... only you? You never say that anyone is going to St Ives other than ...

Hello, I see you're new to YWS! Welcome. I suggest you never use the "pre" thing, because it makes the text be a weird font that's hard on the eyes. ...

Hi Saint! This piece is really solid, and smooth, so my nit-picks will probably be pretty--well--nitpicky... ^_^ Jaden’s heart beat a wild tempo, each beat so loud that he heard ...

Hi Pawprint! So you CAN come on! I thought you told me you weren't allowed? Oh well. Why weren't you at class today? Anyway... I lifted my leg up into ...