Azila

Hi there, Lupis! *gasp* You changed her name! :shock: What was wrong with 'Deuce'? Anyway, onto the nitpicks: Not bothering to brush [s]through[/s] her hair, she wandered downstairs, finding Chessie�

Hi there, Lupis! *gasp* You changed her name! :shock: What was wrong with 'Deuce'? Anyway, onto the nitpicks: Not bothering to brush [s]through[/s] her hair, she wandered downstairs, finding Chessie�

Thanks for the PM! here are some tips I can think of off-hand: Description. 1. Description of the characters can tell a lot about their characters, depending on how you ...

Hi, Jas! Nitpicks first, as always. Her hope had been beautiful and enchanting, but it seemed to have the life span of a butterfly. "Lifespan" is one word. ^_~ She ...

What bucket?

For heaven's sake, girl! You better sneak a lot. ^.~ I'll miss you. ~Azila~

Wow. Either you are a really naughty child, or you hare really strict parents* -- I don't remember you going two months in a row without being grounded! >.< I'll ...

Hi there, Kyte! I only have two nitpicks... A grizzled old man steppe out of the haze, carrying several tomes over his arms. That should be "stepped." ^_~ It's just ...

Yes, please write out your words properly! (i.e. say "you" rather that "u" and "are" rather than "r") It will gain you much more respect around here. Also, we request ...

Hi there! I have a few more nitpicks to deliver... “Do you want the salt, Ma-” I begin to say Matty, then pause when I feel my mother’s eyes lock ...

Hello! Wow. this was really creepy!! :shock: Anyway, I'll talk more about that later. Nitpicks first. “I hate her,” she chanted over and over again. This is completely a matter ...

These are really nice, Via! 1. Not my favorite. It seems a bit foggy and blurry... also, I would have liked to see the edges of the leaves on at ...

I like it! I think you should add a little more detail on the eyes, because it looks like she's blind or something. XD Also, the outstretched hand looks a ...

Yes, 'tis a bit cliché, but I don't actually mind that. Before angry mobs begin to flock my dining room, screeching that I'm not fit to critique, I will explain ...

Hi, Stella! You say I can be brutal? Oh goody goody! Nit-picks first... Mam was teary for weeks, and we could hear her sobbing from her and Dad’s room. The ...