Azila

Hey, Sokool! I love this story, I just had to tell you. :D Anyway, I'll go more into that later. Nitpicks first: Everyone was running around, unsure of what to ...

Hiya! I just HAD to review this, because I live next-door to an old cemetery and... yeah. Anyway, nitpicks first: Is it really that strange to visit a graveyard when ...

Let's end this thread. If anyone wants to talk about this short story or anything else, just PM me. I think there's enough said here for now, though. If you ...

Without slowing down she barrelled through the door and came to a skidding stop within the building. There should be a comma after "down" and also, where I cone from ...

"I want my ashes to be thrown to the wind, to dance and swirl and float on thin air..." ~Sierra If you could change one thing about how you look, ...

Well, aside from meeting pirates (which would be dorky) maybe you could just make there be action between the kids? I mean, if I was stranded with 9 friends on ...

These are beautiful! My favorites are #3 (because of the contrast of the thin, wiry vines and the strong tree--also, I love the colors and composition) and #4 (This one ...

Hello, there! Because you're NOT entering this into the contest, I thought I'd give it a review. :D Nitpicks first, overall views after. I was a good distance back from ...

I agree with Elephantwalrus: you have a lot of emotion here, which is a very good start. But why stop there? Why not go on, and show us more imagery? ...

I wanted to put way more in, but the word limit was 1000, and I already went over... once the contest is over, I'll edit it to make it better. ...

Sounds like they would have straight dark hair (probably short) and green eyes. Might be one of those people who kind of scares you because they look at you so ...

I like it a lot. The proportions are perfect! I would just suggest (as a few others have) that you define the shadows more clearly. Right now, all her skin ...

Hi, Scribe! I go to many places, several times a year, to help with the vexation. I'm not sure "vexation" is the word you're lookin' for... To the best of ...

I'm reading The Book Thief as well. It hasn't gotten very depressing yet (I'm a slow reader--not even a quarter of the way through yet) but because of the time ...

Hi, Penguin! Nitpicks first: Cold perfection stretched across her face, broken only briefly, by those eyes. Either you should delete the comma after "briefly" or you should make it into ...