Azila

Hi, Swottielottie! Nitpicks first. That was why it was better to stay in doors away from them. "Indoors" is one word. She still learned things though. There should be a ...

Aww! This is cute... and I like the captions. :D I agree with kitty15 that most of these pictures are pretty much snapshots--not artful, but terribly adorable. :) The last ...

Hi, Camille! You know as well as I do that I'm extremely unexperienced in poetry... so my review probably won't help at all, but I just had to review this ...

Hello, there! Nitpicks first, then I'll tell you what i think of it overall after. “Dance as if no one were watching, sing as if no one were listening, and ...

Hiya, Lizzy! Joeducktape seems to have found all the flaws, but I'll try to make a helpful review anyway. :D Suddenly, the phone went dead but unfortunately my mind didn't ...

Hiya! Well, I told you I'd deliver--now I am. :wink: The color suited him as well, making his pale skin a little less noticeable and bringing out his dark blue ...

I'm doing this! Even the Golden Gate bridge will be going dark!

Millie had dressed, finished her breakfast, and was shrugging into an old coat, when Ezra stumbled out of the bedroom into the main room of the farmhouse. I don't think ...

I really don't have much to say, considering this is so short and grammatically-sound. The only suggestion I have is that you add a bit more description--sensual description. You don't ...

Heya, Mizz iceberg! The oil sizzled and crackled has I dumped in the rice, letting a puff of steam up clouding my glasses. I think that last part should either ...

Hello, there! I see you're new to the YWS: welcome! But we do have a rule here, that you make a couple reviews on OTHER PEOPLE'S pieces before posting your ...

Remember I told you to PM me when you post more? Well, you didn't. *grumble* i wanted to get here before everyone else. :( Oh well... next time? ^_~ Penelope's ...

Hi, Keek! Do you mind if I try my hand at critiquing this? Why thank you -- my pleasure. :D It looked up to the sky, twin daughters of the ...

Hello! Nitpicks first. There is only one thing I can and will now say to everyone I love. "Death is only the beginning." The period after "love" should be a ...

Hiya, Cal! I'm afraid I might not have much to say, considering that Suz and Sam have already gotten here before me. I shall do my best to give a ...