Azila

The short style thing was sort of weird, I know, I kind of felt that that was how Victoria should speak so maybe I should write it in First Person? ...

Yeah, I was about to "complain" about the length... So post the whole thing! XD Also, make sure you use a spell-checker or something, because those mistakes Periwinkle noticed were ...

Hehe. I was actually afraid that I was overlooking something, because I assumed that you'd find passive voice. :P I'm glad I could help, anyway! Lol. By the way, are ...

The only thing I've really noticed is that the buttons at the top (like the "My YWS" or "Community" or "Writing" or "Resources") are all messed up and pixelated, like ...

Hmm... I never really saw this as a problem, but whatever. Here are the only ones I could see a "remedy" to: (2) Teenagers are characterized by acts of defiance ...

This is really short, but I'll see what I can do. :P As Curiosity crashed on the chair a surprised squeal stole through the air and a small cat jumped ...

Hello! Brace yourself for the critique of a lifetime, mortal! :twisted: -Nitpicks- It’s weird to see the streets of this city again. "Weird" is an extremely weak word. Don't put ...

1. Wow. That's overwhelming! I would like to see it zoomed out a teensy bit more, just so that we could see the top of its head. Either that, or ...

Wow. That's... strange. I think it would have been better if you got the whole wand in the picture. And also, I would have liked to see the WHOLE background ...

This is really neat. I like the festivity and the colors are very cool. I do agree with kitty15, though, that you should darken the background a tad. And also, ...

I've had the same avatar the whole time I've been on the site. Some people have told me I should get another one, but I don't think that will happen ...

Hi, Em! I did my best imagining laying on my back, fists full of my soft carpet. I think that should be "lying." I write about fairies, how they are ...

As long as the narrator is a character, I think it's fine to swear in the narrative, if that's how the character thinks/talks. Dialogue is the same, of course--not all ...

Yeah, these are really nice. The hair is quite good, though I feel like in the bigger picture of her, it's a bit too perfect--if you know what I mean. ...

Hello! The mass of papers and books, which crowded the desk, rattled with fear. This would read better as "The mass of papers and books crowding the desk rattled with ...