Azila

Hi, Casey! Nitpicks first... He has scruffy dark brown hair that I love to mess up and big dark brown eyes that lit up every time he's happy. Should be ...

Hello, Andy! As always, nitpicks first... I crossed my arms to conceal my breasts, soothing myself in the comfort of its embrace. Whats embrace? This doesn't make sense. Maybe "their ...

Hiya! The moonlight streaming in from behind the curtains shimmered on her face, making her beauty even more impossible. Her beauty overthrew him, she was the one thing he had ...

Hi, Jenni! I will try not to be mean, but in being thorough I might be a bit harsh. Please don't be offended--I am here to help... we are still ...

I'm Jason.

Hello, JFW! Remember that you're supposed to PM me when you post more of these?! *grumbles* Anyway... I will try to point out most of the places you start with ...

Grammatical nitpicks and such first... “Come on, we are going to be late for class if we do not hurry up” shouted Brad, as we searched for my lucky quarter ...

Good thing the Internet is back on! I'm just kidding, I like it a lot. :D I'd love to do that on my wall...

So that I may use his antlers for rest, and be his Queen of the Forest Ouch. XD That is one forced rhyme, if I've ever heard one! I would ...

It really depends on the character--if they're an odd person, who nobody knows what they are thinking, I usually like to use 3rd... that way you can keep the distance, ...

Can you PLEASE spread out your dialogue? It's really hard to read, and thus I just barely scanned it. If you fix this, and PM me about it, I'll return ...

Firstly, there are the people like you (and me!) who love rats. But I know a lot of people who associate the word "rat" with plague, disease and filth. Also, ...

Hiya, JFW! As always, I loved this... but more on that later. :D You say I can be harsh? You will regret those words, mortal. :twisted: NOTE: I wrote most ...

Hello! I told you I'd come back, and I have. "I'll send ye to Davy Jones' locker and plunder yer coffer, ye salty blow-fish." The lieutenant growled... This should be ...

These are really nice, Cal! Are they in the official Downloads section? *just wondering* ~Azila~