Azila

EEP! Can you please get rid of the "pre" setting? It is so hard on the eyes. Just make sure that you put a space between all of your paragraphs ...

-Nitpicks- Females paced around the camp tending to the young , the old, and the sickly. All was sound as the young laid down with litter mates and mothers. Repetition ...

Hello! It always took about a half minute and he was used to stepping aside a foot and rearranging his suit using the reflection in the mirror-like wall paneling. Two ...

Hello! I'm reporting for duty. I hope that when you said I should critique your poetry you didn't have a certain one in mind, 'cause I just picked at random ...

Hello! Picture #1>> Very cool! I like the "oh, really?" type of expression. Picture #2>> I like the contrast of the orange-ish background and her green eyes. but I would ...

You're best friend, you say? :P Anyway, the picture is a bit blurry and the colors aren't vibrant enough. Maybe try making it darker and higher contrast? Also, I would ...

**Complimentary Contest Critique** -Nitpicks- "Jase!" I screamed between splutters, as the thick, pungent smoke slowly smothered my breath. "Where are-." This should be: "Jase!" I screamed between spl

Hi! Slipping dread adorned a dimly lit café, its interior like the sallow skin of the despondent. Shouldn't that be "dimly-lit"? Eventually the world is what you say it is, ...

Good point, Suz! Sorry, I'll clarify: I guess what I mean by 'perfect' is that they are how YOU would like to be. So they would do what you would ...

I know perfect characters are considered "Mary-Sues" or clichés. And I know that we all try not to write about them. But don't you occasionally feel the urge to read ...

I'm back! I thought of a few things I would like to say... Firstly, I have to disagree with KJ (sorry, hon!). The scene with Tara in the end really ...

Hi, Andy! I'm back. :twisted: -Nitpicks- They were tiny mirrors that fell, cracked, and splashed the world that was beneath the clouds. Either you should delete the bold part, or ...

I think it's a matter of imagination and exaggeration. Everyone has everything in them... a little bit. If you want to have a completely messed-up character, you have to find ...

Hi, Sokool! -Nitpicks- She jumped as the phone rang shrilly. She leapt over and snatched it, her voice trembling with hope as she answered. Both these sentences start with "she." ...

How did fire get into it?