Azila

Hi. I'm sorry I couldn't get this to you sooner, I've been real busy and haven't been able to get on YWS at all, really. -Nitpick- Twelve forty eight in ...

Hello! I'm back. -Nitpicks- He was embarrassing me! I was blushing so hard. I agree with Alainna in that you really don't need that first sentence. After dinner everyone went ...

I didn't really read the other peoples' nitpicks, just the overalls. If I repeat something, please forgive me. :D -Nitpicks- My mother has to go to another room she’s crying ...

Again, I just skimmed the other reviews, so please pardon me if I repeat something. -Nitpicks- The mansion in which Carrie lived was out of sight, despite how big it ...

Hello! I only skimmed the other peoples' reviews, so I might repeat stuff... but please find it in your heart to forgive me. :P -Nitpicks- So tall that it would ...

Hello! I'm back. -Nitpicks- Jumping onto my bed I grabbed my phone. I think there should be a comma before "I" and after "bed." I quieted my breath, and I ...

-Nitpicks- Any job will do at this point; he just wants to think of something else. This might just be me, but When I hear someone say "think of something," ...

I only need less than twenty more crits in order to get another star! ...so, who wants a review? They're free. ~Azila~

Hello! This is, of course, after I’ve been woken up by a button being pushed. This would go better as "after I've been woken up by the push of a ...

You say you want grammatical help? That's what I'll give you, then. :twisted: The random bleep of items being scanned echoed through the large, marble tiled grocery. There are two ...

I think this was supposed to be posted as a review here . I'll see if I can get a Mod to lock this thread. ~Azila~

*ehem* Why didn't you PM me about this, Missy? Do you want me to stop giving you critiques or something? Haha, just kidding... :wink: Derik came forward a few more ...

I'm back. :twisted: -Nitpicks- I will not listen to any of them, I thought. I will ignore them; they can’t hurt me today. Today, I’ll become one of them. Thoughts ...

Hello! Are you new to the YWS? I don't think I've seen you around before. Welcome! -Nitpicks- Snow blew from all sides with fierce winds pushing them. Pushing who? I ...

Can you please spread out your paragraphs? Because there are no indentations here on the YWS, it gets really hard to read if your paragraphs are too big. Example: “The ...