Azila

Hey there! I want to make it clear before I start that I am by NO MEANS an expert when it comes to poetry. In fact, I'm pretty unknowledgeable. But ...

Hello! Lovely imagery you've got here. But I'll go into that more later -- nitpicks first. She trusted her fingers to their task – to perfect the shaded colors of ...

Wow. This is a real improvement. Of course, I don't use indents while writing in MS Word because I just space it out as I write so it will be ...

Hello! Overall, I have to say, I really liked this. But more of that later -- nitpicks first. :D That caused Arabella to smile, but we all consulted Lori who ...

Hello! I haven't read 'Cabbage,' but I hope that doesn't matter. :D The hum of the air conditioner accompanied the sound of his mother’s shifting around nervously. I think that ...

Thank you all so much! canislupis>> I actually was thinking of Zalti's hotel a little when writing this, combined with a motel we stayed at in New Hampshire. And sorry ...

Hi, swordbirdclub! :D I see you're new to YWS. We ask that you make two or three reviews of other peoples' work before posting anything of your own. This rule ...

I'm about to edit this using your suggestions, so if you want, I can PM you once I edit it and I'll probably add some more, too. Sure, Monki! PM ...

Ooh! I was randomly shuffling through your portfolio and saw this -- and decided to revisit it. :D Random note: I just remembered why the name Isaria sounded so familiar ...

Nitpicks I turned on my iPod and turned it to the angriest-sounding song I had. --I don't like the repetition of "turned" in this sentence. Maybe "switched" (either instance) or ...

If you wouldn't mind: It's Other Fiction, and hasn't gotten many crits yet. Thanks so much! ~Azila~

Thank you so much, both of you! I greatly appreciate your criticism. This is an experimental piece, so I love to hear what you think. ChernobyllyInclined>> You are right. Jason ...

Alright... if you wouldn't mind: Thank yo so much! Let me know if there's anything you want me to crit in return. :D ~Azila~

Drawing #1>> Very nice! I don't like that the legs are cut off, but that's probably just your scanner. Also, it kind of looks like he's not wearing pants, which ...

Hello, Wolf -- I've returned for more! :twisted: Nitpicks Mrs. Watson called tonight. About a half hour ago, my mom had come tramping up the stairs, red-faced and angry. I'm ...