Azila

Hi Suzanne! I have returned for second helpings. :D The burnt red paint on the door was pealing like a flakey scab. I have to agree with Andy -- this ...

Hey, Suz! So many other people have already reviewed this, that I'm not so sure how helpful my review will be. I'll try, though, because I don't want to just ...

Thank you so, so much, Suzanne! That critique really helped a lot... not only with helping me realize what I need to work on, but also with boosting my morale. ...

Hi Suzanne! Your critique on part one of Raincatcher was so awesome that I've come back asking for a repeat act on part two . Seriously, I have to say ...

*gasp* You never got your complimentary critique for participating in the Instructor contest! :shock: Why didn't you PM someone? If we had known that whoever was assigned to your piece ...

Because they eat their vegetables. Why does a vest have no sleeves?

Hi all! I'm thinking of having a (main) character who's blind. So I just wanted to learn all you guys happen to know about blindness: what can cause it, especially. ...

So far, it seems like it could be interesting if the characters are interesting. I don't really know the characters (because I've only read this outline, and not the actual ...

Hi! I'm not that good with poetry, but I'll do my best to give a helpful review anyway. :P I agree with... *goes off to check who said it* ...Leja ...

This picture is soooo huge! @_@ Is there any way you can downsize it? Because I had to make my browser window as big as possible so it was filling ...

Hello, and welcome to the YWS! Please excuse me if my review is harsh--sometimes it just comes out, lol. Anyway, nitpicks first: The darkness that consumed me whole scared me ...

Alright, Nitpicks first. First in the county spelling bee, first in districts, and now this. --Shouldn't this be "First in the county spelling bee, THEN in districts, and now this?" ...

Hi, Canis! Far off down the road, I can see the village, lights glowing faintly inside. --Inside what? Maybe I'm just being dull, but I think you should specify. I ...

Hi, yoyo! You asked that I tell you when part two is up ... and well now it is! I'm still not completely sure where this piece is going, and ...

“Up and at ‘em!” “Mhrr-hmm…” he rolled over, flailing his limbs in the oppressive heat. His legs were suffocated in a tangle of sheets. “Jason, it’s me, Sierra,” a kind, ...