Azila

Hi Thanks for reading it, guys! I'm so surprised that I got replies already! Squallz: Thanks for the criticism, I will keep it in mind as I re-read. Snoink: Thank ...

Snow. It is all that I see. I am surrounded by the gleaming blizzard; it swirls down to the ground me. I am lying on my side, half buried in ...

Hi Yeah, I agree with what Skool15 and ShadowTwit said; It is an awesome story, but it needs some more editing. Try reading it through to yourself -- under your ...

Thanks everyone! Lady Pirate: I actually have started another Zaphyros story, but encountered some writers block along the way :( so gave it up for a bit. I look forward ...

Ahh... the elegance of simplicity! I would actually go so far as t say it's a masterpiece. I have a few clarification suggestions (just suggestions, note, take them or leave ...

A Demonstration A floor-length turquoise cloak and bright purple hat on the hat stand outside the kitchen announced the presence of Professor Z. –as Zephyros had come to be called ...

She used to sit on the porch all morning and all afternoon, even in the winter, when there were no leaves in the trees and only cats strayed the streets. ...

Thanks, skool15 and Pirate Lady! I actually have written another piece about Professor Z, but I'm going to wait like another day to post it. :lol: Anyway, thanks again guys! ...

A Speech The great Dining Hall was abuzz with conversation; a guest had come to the university from far away. This guest was an old gentleman with white, bushy hair, ...

It is kind of short, so I can't give much critique except the line-by-line kind. "The garage shielded us from the cruel July sun. Boredom had left me lacking energy ...

Personally, I liked it quite a lot. Though the plot wasn't particularly original, it was well-written. I think the kind of distant narration gives it an almost journalistic effect, which ...