Azila

Madame Kool (as I have noticed you call yourself), I really liked this! I loved that transition Dreamer pointed out, and the whole concept is really original. That said... I ...

I really liked this piece. It was a very fresh way of writing about a topic that a lot of people write about. I noticed a few things that I ...

Hi! I've never critiqued poetry, so bear with me here. :lol: I really liked this poem; the imagery (as people have said) is beautiful. I'm just not sure about how ...

It's pretty good. I found the ending a little strange and not in keeping with the rest of the piece. It's well-written, but the plot is just sort of random. ...

Hi! I didn't know you posted this! Remember, you were supposed to PM me when you posted anything? *ehem* Anyway, down to business. This piece kind of seems like a ...

I liked it a lot. It was short, but sweet. I like the description of the cemetery and you seem to captured the main charactor's slightly frazzled (I love that ...

I really enjoyed reading this. I love how you're summing up a writer's world and looking at it from the outside in... so to speak. :D I just have one ...

Thanks guys! Yeah, that opening sentence is a little rough. I'm not sure how I'm gonna rewrite it quite yet, but I will. Oh, and canislupis: I changed the part ...

A little girl in a blue dress the deep color of the evening sky with white lace like stars frolics with a friend. They roll together on the rug, now ...

I really liked this piece. Not too wordy, not too soppy, yet well-phrased and emotional. I have just one suggestion. No one that dies of tragically delegated misfortune, ever chooses ...

Thanks everyone! nickelodeon: I know what you mean; I'll try to work with that. canislupis: I don't quite get what you mean about it being to rhythmical. PM me. And ...

Hi! I liked it a lot. I know how Zack feels, and I like how you told it from someone else's point of view. That was really unexpected and I ...

I agree with Skool15. It goes really fast. A little more detail would make it read better. Try adding more setting description. And the sighting of the deer should really ...

OK. This is pretty good. I like the characters-- you present them all very well and they are all very realistic. The only thing is that I don't really relate ...

This is only part-fiction. I actually saw the woman asleep in the airport in one of many out-of-place rocking lawn chairs, but I made up her story. ---------------------- The long, ...