Azila

Nice idea here! Really, a truly intriguing concept. :D I have a few suggestions: Add description What it this lobby like? Is it fancy, with a crystal chandelier or dumpy ...

I don't know if the "Click here if you are over 18" adds are good for the sight... obviously, I never clicked on one, but they're the only ones that ...

Welcome! I look forward to reading some of your work and seeing you around! So... enjoy yourself here! I think you'll find everyone friendly and nice... I have anyway. Yea, ...

this is goign to get SOO confusing! If we tried to PM someone with their old name, for instance, it wouldn't work... right? I wish it would auto-correct it for ...

Nice one, Jonny! Never Rising Sun I look at the jagged horizon. Which way is East? I cannot recollect; it had been so long since I have seen a sunrise. ...

That was cool! I like stories where dreams and reality coexist in a kind of creepy way! However, there are a lot of grammalical errors and typos that make me ...

The new version is much better! It makes it a lot more interesting if you use more different words, don't you agree? You still use "begin" a lot... "he begins ...

Very nice piece here! Truly, it has a lot of potential. I think the main downfall of it is that you use the same words to describe things over and ...

Yummm! That was a good cherry... especially considering it's not really the peak of cherry season. Where's you get it? I can never find places that sell hypothetical cherries, they're ...

Hi LP! I was flipping through your portfolio and found this. I really hope you don't mind me digging up something so old! I REALLY liked this piece. I must ...

Hi! I've come to collect that cherry on top!! lol. Yeah, as St Razor said, you really should critique other people before posting your work. But I'll critique you anyway ...

Hi! I liked this. I loved the way you had the three words all alone in their own paragraphs and italicized... very cool. :wink: It is a bit cliche, as ...

We'd all need to hold up posters with our avatars on them... that's how I think of people, by their avatars. Wouldn't it be funny if we had our avvies ...

Thanks people! I'm not that crazy about this piece myself anyway... so I don't mind if you say it stinks. You don't have to coat your critiques in honey or ...

C'mon guys! Is anyone elso going to critique this?! Or are you going to make poor Sunshine send it in with nothing but my 12 year-old opinion??? (just coming to ...