AylaStarr

I think some people take poetry rules a bit too serious, in that if it has no meter or rhythm, there must be something wrong with it. Form wise, this ...

Wow. There's much to be said about this piece, despite its length. Alright. First, the negatives. The "gray, gray, gray..." thing was almost a turn-off for me, because repetition works ...

No doubt, this was beautifully written. You wove in descriptions and imagery wonderfully, as smooth as silk. There were no bumps at all through the writing, but I do agree ...

Haha, well this was just a joy to read! It was witty, sarcastic, smart, and still managed to be poetic. I think murtuza said everything that I would have said ...

Your writing style is remarkable! I love the use of repetition in this, and how there was nothing that was really spelled out for the reader. You could benefit from ...