AylaStarr

I think some people take poetry rules a bit too serious, in that if it has no meter or rhythm, there must be something wrong with it. Form wise, this ...

Wow. There's much to be said about this piece, despite its length. Alright. First, the negatives. The "gray, gray, gray..." thing was almost a turn-off for me, because repetition works ...

No doubt, this was beautifully written. You wove in descriptions and imagery wonderfully, as smooth as silk. There were no bumps at all through the writing, but I do agree ...

She’s a beautiful thing, The Lady . She grabs me, and suddenly I’m screaming. Higher, higher, jumping off a tree, landing in a pile of clouds. Have I always screamed ...

She’s a beautiful thing, The Lady . She grabs me, and suddenly I’m screaming. Higher, higher, jumping off a tree, landing in a pile of clouds. Have I always screamed ...

Haha, well this was just a joy to read! It was witty, sarcastic, smart, and still managed to be poetic. I think murtuza said everything that I would have said ...

Your writing style is remarkable! I love the use of repetition in this, and how there was nothing that was really spelled out for the reader. You could benefit from ...

A/N: Not finished, just a story idea for now. Might possibly be extended into more/a novel. * Ren Taylor. Renny-Benny. Reginald. Reginald. Reginald Frank Taylor. Right now, you are in ...

Aww, Jovie is such a lovely name! And it reminds me of Bon Jovi, which is always a terrific thing, I suppose :) Haha, anyhoo, welcome to YWS! Here at ...

Hello and thank you for commenting! Just to answer your question, the story is in the view of one single character, but he's always mixing up the past with the ...

Hello! Thank you so much for the beautiful comment! I changed the things you mentioned :) Still trying to find time, but I will gladly comment back on a piece ...

Hello there! If it makes you feel any better, I'm a very moody 18-year old who's currently trying to find her voice. Anyway, I know you'll find YWS to be ...

PITCH : You are a wallflower. At seventeen, you have acknowledged that. In fact, your contradictory nature now despises and craves it. At this point in your life, you only ...

Hello! Pretty much what everyone else has said. This site has some very seasoned readers and writers. They know what they're talking about, yet at the same time, they never ...

Welcome to YWS! My name's Ayla! This site has SO much to offer, so I know you're gonna have a blast here. Don't be shy about sharing your stories, because ...