AwkwardMeerkat

This is a dramatic monologue, not a short story. But thanks for the review anyway.

Hey so while your stuff would be helpful I'm sure in another situation this piece is a dramatic monologue, not like a short story. But I mean thanks for the ...

Hey! Sorry, I didn't get back to you sooner, I have had a lot of stuff due in creative writing, it's been a mess. I'm sorry you don't like the ...

I actually saw this when I was writing about Aric in the second instalment and honestly, I just thought that was really funny. Actually, I gloss over most of the ...

Yeah, this story takes place modern day, but the main characters don't stay on earth. This really isn't a great chapter to start on, it's a backstory chapter. Alex while ...

Honestly, people like you are such blessings. I have a bad habit of using comma splices because I have a burning hatred for the word and. (Also Firebreed isn't two ...

Hey happy for the review! Honestly, after I posted this I went and did a huge redo on most chapters done in the same style, but your feedback is still ...

Flux is one of the main characters yes. Grammer really isn't my strong suit, so I get what you mean by excessive ellipses. I really don't remember what draft I ...

Thanks for the review! Yeah, I'm really bad with grammar. As for the rest of the fleshing it out I did add a lot of that in the next draft ...

Nah, can't I've tried something similar tho, trust me it's better to create your own style over time rather than force it.

I figured that's what you're doing, but remember that they still are two different types of media and something that would work well in an anime may fall flat in ...

Ah, yeah I feel ya. Writers block sucks.

Nah its alright, don't apologise. what you can do is limit yourself to only two describing factors, I would avoid hair color and eye color unless your using symbolism or ...

Yea i know what you mean, first person can be hard to write in. I think it works well for your story tho.

I'm doing my best. (Honestly you didn't use a lot of gendered pronouns so I was like well, there a girl I guess)