Audy

I agreed with everything above, but to add my two cents: The poem seemed drawn out to me. There were a lot of places where the same ideas were repeated, ...

I've joined YWS on November 10 after having realized that I was actually dead-serious upon writing a story that had been configurating in my head for three years. This was ...

It sounds like a good and interesting start to a story, are you going to go on with it? :) I like the dialogue. It's quick and not bogged down ...

Hey Eliza! I'm going to be doing a line by line critique. I apologize beforehand if I sound rude, please don't take it personally. I tend to do that, but ...

It sounds here that this is a character-driven story. So developing your characters, and later characterizing them is going to be pretty important. Your characters have to be believable, they ...

Psychological thriller, or a story about the corrupted government. Asterisk

I tend to imagine the first chapter like an opening scene in a movie playing in my head. I'm a real visual person, so the words usually come easy to ...

Hm, maybe you should try to write an episodic novel? She's the daughter of a well-respected count, right? So maybe the pirates take her on board the ship in a ...

Whatever you do, don't give yourself a time limit or word limit or anything like that. Don't think about writing 1,000 words a day or anything like that o_o Trust ...

My ongoing novel right now is at 77,000 words--which is definitely the longest I've ever written. I've still got about 50,000 more to go :/ My average with all my ...

This flows so beautifully! A truly wonderful work of art--how you have the musician and the dancer. Muaha, you're a clarinet player, aren't you Snoink? :wink: I got a nice ...

Well I for one liked the repetition. This poem meant a good deal to me, because knowing someone who has been in depression kinda put me in a state of ...

The theme was really cute, and you do a good job at evoking emotion in this. You should be proud, this poem has got a lot of feeling in it, ...

If my dog could talk, I know he would never lie to me . :D So I'd type a little faster and get this novel of mine finished. 8) What ...

Sounds like a horror or something about ghosts. Could even be a tragedy thing. I've read too many of those books though, so I might not pick it up. I ...