Audy

More detail does not necessarily mean more strict. I guess it all depends on your story, and what personally works better for you -- I find that without an outline, ...

lol, I'm probably way off, but based on your avatar I see a hippie :P Long wavy blond hair, tall, and big wide blue eyes with glasses?

Alright so I apologize beforehand if I sound harsh or anything, I have your best intentions at heart :) I was in my bed. Not quite asleep anymore, but I ...

Mix it up with action. I.e. "Molly shook her head from side to side, her spiky red hair falling into her eyes. " Or “Are you alright?” Mary asked, concern ...

Wow. The ending was real powerful, it left shivers going down my spine. That was simply, wow! It evoked so much emotion, I could feel the heartbreak and the longing, ...

Very awesome! I one day hope too, that you will visit my thread if I ever finish my first draft :X But all the same, congratulations; finishing a first draft ...

OR sometimes your characters are the ones who come first :D I remember I was sitting in class one day and I had so much work to do it was ...

Heh, this has been pretty helpful. :oops: I was just looking at my novel and my first 3 chapters are like 20k in length! xD Definitely needs to be cut ...

Yay! Thanks for the reminder, Nate. I'm so used to Firefox, now, definitely prefer it to IE. I once was typing up a very long and detailed email to one ...

A couple of tips: Much like what JFW said, short & sweet sentences actually help quicken the pace. Also, you might want to try and build up the suspense. I ...

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Is it the story that you hate, or the writing? If you feel really strongly about a story or plot, I'd say keep working on it. Sometimes there are little ...

Thank you everyone ^_^ I'll be editing around a month from now, and then I might post some of the chapters up. I've got the prologue already up. So that's ...

This is a very powerful image, I loved how you described it using the shadows and the smokes :D You are very talented! The other, broad shouldered, steps forward and ...

I agree with what was said above. The repetition was good but it was just too long, maybe it was just the double-spaces, but I was just scrolling down thinking ...