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Justagirl, I know you needed this by Tuesday, so I had to get this done ASAP xD Sorry if it's sloppily written. I think I've already mentioned in the PM ...

I'll try to make it ;) Futuristic snowball fights? ...you don't even want to know.

Twit, Heh. Overall I love the voice in this and the strange structures of your sentences, use of 'shilly-shally' etc. it helps with that oldish tone of voice, and the ...

JamieP, Here to return the favor. I like this piece a lot! By all means, don't be nervous of posting! I think there's a very nice flow in this, and ...

Strollers come to this cobblestone walk to trample over my pebbled eyes, too much have I glimpsed only shadows of him, in sunlight absorbed by me. The avenue boils up ...

Jas, This is a lovely poem for an experimental piece, certainly, the double-poem did it's job and I'll tell you what I thought about it in a second. First, I ...

Temi, I love the emotions expressed in this :) I also thought the flow and rhythm worked together quite well. My only critique though would be to implement more images ...

Redfang - xD You made my day. I'll post sometime tonight, as well. Sorry I've been kind of MIA - had a lot of stuff going on. In any case, ...

Deanie, You've gotten a lot of great reviews already, and I think they've each highlighted different aspects to help with the improvements. I'll try not to repeat anything and give ...

Blue, Don't think I disappeared on you. Slow and steady, right? Right. Okay, so right off the bat, the first sentence is a fragment. Not an okay-let-it-slide fragment, like this ...

Luuuuuumi, I love this piece. I think it's very blues-y, and I'm wondering if the 6/8 refers to a particular time signature (though I'm not all that adept at music, ...

Jane Austen, You have great taste in username ;) Now as for the poem, you expressed worries about it sound self-centered - I find it kind of interesting you thought ...

This one is especially awful. Avert your eyes.

Noelle, I actually love this poem as a lyrical piece more than a dramatic piece. There were repetitive lines I felt were really interesting, because they sort of help build ...

Liquiddeath, It's a cute little poem for something you quickly made up. The rhyme scheme was pretty soft. I mean, the flow wasn't bad, but the word-choice and the descriptions ...