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Re: Biography of a villain
Hey! So I think your character has a good solid voice and all, with the "yeah,yeah poor kid" part, so that is really good, but overall, you just need to ...
May 31, 2011 -
Re: Techno Fan (First edit)
Hello! So I figured I would review this, since I loved the song so much. ^.^ I really think this has an interesting plot. Father abandons family for his big ...
May 31, 2011 -
Re: Staring Stars (Contest Entry, Feedback Please!) MAJOR EDITS
Hello! I actually started this review a week ago, only finishing it now. Sorry >.< I love ninjas, I know almost nothing about them though, even so, this piece is ...
May 27, 2011 -
Re: I Can't Do This
Hello! Wow, this is an interesting interpretation of the prompt, I really think it something worth exploring. I always find it extremely interesting how someone with agoraphobia/msyophobia is able to ...
May 24, 2011 -
Re: Strays Don't Sleep
Hello! So I must confess, this is my second time reading this piece. The language you use really is beautiful, it's the kind of writing you just want to read ...
May 16, 2011 -
Re: Hate Kills.
Hey! So I think your dealing with a very powerful subject here, hate crimes and discrimination. It's definitly something that is very emotional, so heart-wrentching, purely awful. The idea that ...
May 12, 2011 -
Re: You Can't Erase Ch. 2
Hello! Back again for another review, hope you don't mind. ^.^ As I have said, I think you have a fantastic premise. It is interesting to see how your MC ...
May 12, 2011 -
Re: You Can't Erase ch.1
Hello! Thought I'd come by and review this! So your premise is interesting. Something happened to your MC, something bad that somehow relates to this Josh character, and now your ...
May 12, 2011 -
Re: Amazing Grace
Heya! Alright, so I liked this. I am a fan of dramatic pieces, and it does not get more dramatic then death does it? =) The blue blood thing is ...
May 11, 2011 -
Re: Age of Magic [Edited - Draft Two]
Hey Jenthura! I really liked this. I loved the whole atmosphere of it. The strange planet, the new technology, your characters, the sphere. You did a really good job creating ...
May 2, 2011 -
Re: Lifewish: Chapter One
Hey penprincess! I liked this, I think it has tons of potential. I particularly liked the repetition of the the line, "How can your surrender when you were never fighting ...
May 2, 2011 -
Re: Touch of Death Chapter 1
Hey! So, this is a cute piece, a high school drama, and I really think it has potential. A love triangle, interplays of relationships and all that. However, I think ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: The Gods play Marbles
Hello again! So I really liked the tone of this piece, it was satirical and removed, and I definitely smiled in a few places. I also think the idea you ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Those Times
Hey! You have something interesting here! I assume it's set in some other time period? What with the carriages, horses, mansions, and teenage marriages and all. Intriguing indeed. First, as ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Dearly Beloved
Hey! This is lovely. =) Your prose is beautiful, like, really beautiful. I am seriously jealous of your mastery of vocabulary, it rare thing when I have to pull out ...
May 1, 2011
