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Re: Whispers of what we lost
I feel like this poem starts off really strong, but it sort of loses steam in the last stanza. With it starting off so powerfully, you should try to do ...
Jun 17, 2009 -
Re: Than You
Normally I don't like minimalistic poetry, but the starkness really works here. The alternating format of the stanzas works too. I also like the switch from "I'm alive" to "I'm ...
Jun 15, 2009 -
Re: Urban Guerrilla
We are the urban guerrilla, The forbidden, Outlawed Warriors of the city. We lack the honor Of your pomp and circumstance armies. We hide, We steal, We cheat, We lie. ...
Jun 15, 2009 -
Re: The Philosopher
This is quite a good concept. I really like the hook in the first sentence. Many times, that's how people test stories - if the first sentence can't get them, ...
Jun 14, 2009 -
Re: Driven to Witchcraft
Oooo, this is so spooky. The rhyme at the beginning really sets the tone of the whole thing. I would consider expanding on this though, adding a bit more detail ...
Jun 14, 2009
