AstridBartleby

This is really quite fantastic. The light-hearted tone was an odd choice-- or so I thought at first. After reading it through a few times, I realized that the tone ...

Well said, sir. And I completely agree. I signed up, thinking this would be a great opportunity to improve as a writer. However, I find myself logging on rather infrequently ...

This is great on a number of levels! I love how the full details aren't revealed until the end. It keeps up the suspense. I also like how we don't ...

This is a great start! Your descriptions are vivid without being over-the-top. There are just a couple of things that seem a bit awkward linguistically. First of all, you should ...

While there is definitely some potential in the story's idea, there are several things that could use some reworking. First of all, as previously mentioned, you do need to watch ...

I've gotta agree with klotrox16, your descriptions are amazing! I have a real sense of Darulli's deteriorating mind and how he sees the world. And you already know how much ...

This is great! One of the creepiest stories I've ever read. I love the use of the parts in italics in the second part. They add this great other dimension ...