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Hey I enjoyed your work. I could really imagine the scene in my mind. Poor prisoner. Anyway, to my opinion, maybe you could made it more gruesome. Well, Happy Holidays!

After many attempts of trying to open my Dad’s locked door, I decided to smash it down. Well, it’s much easier than trying to pick-lock when your hands are so ...

Hi, enjoyed reading your work. It was very interesting. However, I think you need to try to add more emotions,well, thats my opinion. Anyway happy holidays!

Hi, your dialogues were awesome but perhaps you should try to cut it down. Try to put in more description. Oh ya there was a spelling mistake! "Y life is ...

Hi! Your work had very nice description! Loved the way how you described the feelings. Anyway,can't wait for the next part (is there?) and Happy Holidays!

Hi! I loved your description, it was awesome. However, I quite don't understand about the last part. ANyway good joba nd Happy Holidays!

I'm impressed! So far this is the best work I've read! There were emotions, suspense, dialogue and suspense! What more can I ask? Can't wait for the next chapter. Keep ...

Hi! I find your story very interesting. It had emotions and description, but I feel like theres no plot. No hard feelings. Does the character tries to survive throughout the ...

Hey! I've read your story and I could say it was awesome!. You had good description,dialogues and suspense. You even had a good background of your character! The only problem ...

Hi, I enjoyed your worked due to all the suspense you gave. You work had a good start but perhaps you could add in staff other than dialogues. Well, thats ...

Hi, you have a very imaginative mind, but i quite don't understand why the character is very rebellious in the first place. Could you like give a reason why he ...

Hi, I enjoyed your work. It had many action in it but could you try to put more description in your work. Anyway Good Job!

I never liked orcs. They were big, dirty creatures with sharp teeth and horns. Their smell? Oh, don't get me started with that. You could smell them a thousand miles ...