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  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Happy To Depart

    In the first segment the player seems young and since the music sends shivers down their back I would say that it is sending all kinds of endorphins throughout their ...

    Dec 2, 2014

  • Poetry » Dramatic, Realistic
    Re: Chain of a Sinner Vs. Everyday life

    Howdy! Before I comment about the content I would like to provide some suggestions for the grammar aspect of the piece. :) Here it is: "The Chains of a sinner ...

    Oct 20, 2012

  • Poetry » Realistic, General
    Re: Silent Rain

    Howdy! One thing that I noticed initially is that the way that the first segment of text ends does not quite match the flow of the rest of the poem. ...

    Oct 20, 2012

  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General
    Re: No Witnesses

    Hello, fellow writer. really, I enjoyed your story. It was brief, fast-paced, and for the most part. Entertaining. personally, though, I could not help but see a comparison to the ...

    Jul 6, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Holy Communion

    Hello there, fellow writer. Anyhow, as far as my opnion goes here, I was a bit apprehensive on what exactly you were trying to convey in the poem. Like another ...

    May 1, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Mother

    Mother, Do you know what I see in you? A book, a broach, a pearl or shoe? This makes little sense as a follow up question to the one starting ...

    Jan 14, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: Three Stupid Choices (Prologue, Chapter One)

    The protagonists is an extreme rambler and rather annoys me. I'm the type of reader that prefers scenic description over being in a charcater's head for too long, so that's ...

    Dec 15, 2010

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: Deader: Chapter Three - The Undying Dead

    You finally posted a part three. I heard Celeste say from behind me, “You have a blocked nose or something?” Does Celeste just speak with extremly bad grammar or was ...

    Sep 19, 2010

  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General
    Re: Let Me Love You(18)

    Hey, rasca, here I am for my reviewing revival. Like I told you, it's been so .long since I've done one of these. The scent of ammonia from the streak ...

    Aug 13, 2010

  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, General
    Re: District XIII - Prologue

    Hello there. My, my, what a short piece. “We’re going to have to make this quick!” said Haymitch, slowly entering the Everdeen home. “Okay, I’ll be in and out, quick ...

    Jun 20, 2010

  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General
    Re: deleted

    Hey, man. Yeah, like Gryphon said, it is highly unlikely that a mere dozen people could bring a foreign planet to life. It worked for the Bible. First Adam and ...

    Jun 20, 2010

  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: Dearly Beloved

    Hello Ranger. Around 4:00 yesterday, I began doing a review of this story when the internet cut off. It frustrated me, but I'm over it now. So here I am. ...

    Jun 20, 2010

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: Erm, well it doesn't have a title yet

    Alright, I won't be an evil reviewer. At least, I hope not. Either way, here is what I have to say: *Um, yeah... that rhyme was not intentional . ;) ...

    Jun 16, 2010

  • Article / Essay » Review, General
    Re: Twilight

    Hehe, you're going to kill off the sparklies too? I did that a long time ago. But it was more of a military story, of all things. *Shrugs* I made ...

    Jun 9, 2010

  • Article / Essay » Review, General
    Re: The Best Book Ever Read

    Fahrenheit 451 is a short, yet mesmerizing novel. Though I rather miss a certain charcter who dies way too early in the tale. It's sp sad. But the insane world ...

    Jun 4, 2010


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