Ashton

It was a very good poem. I really enjoyed it and it made me feel what true love should be like. If you wrote this in 10 mins and its ...

The underlined words are something I did to be creative but they have a meaning to them. They do play off each other, and they seem to be the most ...

I, personally, thought it was a good poem. Every one has probably felt this way in there life. My critique is just a little thing that can be fixed easily. ...

thanks I hope I keep writing. I start something and then run out of ideas so I will pm you once I write a page or too. You really helped ...

thanks guys! This was a spur of the moment thing. Thanks for the critiqing and i hope some more ppl post too. And yes its ok to use it. And ...

Um the story I am working on at the moment is sort of a unlikely love story, but it doesn't start out as one. And I like the Twilight Series ...

Do you hear my cries? My daddy beats me, and I dont know why? Mommy tried to stop him, but he hit her too. Our bruises are black and blue. ...

A spelling error... Unforgetable is spelled Unforgettable :wink: [quote]Unforgetable petals kept bothering my flower. I wanted to touch you,to feel you.[/quote I would just restructure it like.... thi

[center] Rose Petals The faint sound of rain tapping against the window hadn’t lulled Rose to sleep. So many thoughts running through her head made in impossible to sleep. Tomorrow ...

That is really good, her is two little things i saw.... What happened mabyo? If that his name it should be capitilaized. And then I saw it once or twice, ...

Darkend skies , sunshine dies . Pale legs running, the tears are coming. Eyes filled with terror , wanting to get out of there. Rainfalls, softly down her face. Diamond ...

This a perfect discription of the tender moments we all have when we are in love. Great job capturing it! If I had you perfect way of describing happy things ...

Your poem was stunning. I could almost feel the pain with you. It shows what really goes on inside a girls head. Keep writing and fix the spelling errors that ...

Hi, Im not sure if this what I am supposed to do but here it goes.... I love to write, well no duh thats why I'm here, I would like ...

Hi, Im not sure if this what I am supposed to do but here it goes.... I love to write, well no duh thats why I'm here, I would like ...