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  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Dawn of Light

    Hi, I’m Ashkitten and I’m here for a review. I must say, this was very well written. I feel like there is double meaning here. The fight for the dawn ...

    Apr 23, 2019

  • Poetry » Realistic, Other
    Re: This is the School of Chaos

    I feel like I need more from you. I want so badly to feel something from this poem but there's just one little thing missing. The rhymes are a bit ...

    Dec 17, 2015

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: The Never Ending Battle

    I find this to be a perfect anthem for equality. I love the juxtaposition of the fight between two natural forces, but the fight being unnatural. I like that it's ...

    Dec 16, 2015

  • Poetry » Narrative, Romantic
    Re: - deleted -

    Brilliant! Brilliant!Brilliant!Brilliant!Brilliant!Brilliant! Hiya!! Ashkitten here for a review. I just want to say I loved it. I felt so taken by the whole concept. It took my mind so many ...

    May 16, 2015

  • Short Story » Narrative, Horror
    Re: Just One Yesterday

    Hiya! Ashkitten here for a review. I like the idea of life being like a train ride, and I like the way you made it very relatable. I also like ...

    May 16, 2015

  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, Dramatic
    Re: Frozen's Flame

    Hiya!! Ashkitten here for a review. Already turning blue, numbness fills my limps and penetrates my bones to their core. limbs is spelled wrong The silence is madness. So thick, ...

    May 16, 2015

  • Short Story » Narrative, Realistic
    Re: We All Shouted Terrorist. We All Hated Them.

    Hellloooo!!!!!!! Ashkitten here for a review. I loved the way this was narrated into two different points of view. I think you did a great job describing the horror that ...

    May 16, 2015

  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Humor
    Re: Avery Trent - Chapter 1 (Renegade Sneeze)

    I loved it. Quite humorous. I love that you took something so ordinary as a sneeze and made a whole entire story around it. I also love the little bit ...

    May 16, 2015

  • Poetry » Health, Narrative
    Re: Call It Sanity

    I thoroughly enoyed this poem. I feel like the bouncing around from idea to idea is a lot how our thoughts bounce around so erratically. I have lately been practicing ...

    May 16, 2015

  • Short Story » General, Mystery / Suspense
    Re: Devils and Demons

    I really love the imagery, and the character descriptions. You are very descriptive and to me, that is the most important part of writing. I felt like I was right ...

    May 16, 2015

  • Poetry » Dramatic, Narrative
    Re: Colors that sketch my life

    Hello, Ashkitten here for a review. I see that other reviewers have touched on most of the grammatical errors, like the misspelling of beech (beach) trough (through) write (white) but ...

    Apr 12, 2015

  • Poetry » Romantic, General
    Re: Hold Me Gently

    Hello, Ashkitten here for a review. Im going to commend you first on your ability to capture the best things about a deep relationship in this poem and essentially everything ...

    Apr 11, 2015

  • Short Story » Health, General
    Re: He tells me stories

    Hello! Ashkitten here for a review. I love and adore the idea. The personification of an eating disorder in this way is so horrific, and yet makes such a great ...

    Apr 11, 2015

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: How does one forget?

    Hello!!! Ashkitten here for a review. How do you forget, those dumb mistakes you've made. How do you let them go to fly away in the wind. How do you ...

    Apr 10, 2015

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Thirteen Ways of Looking at Hands

    This is by far the best poem I've read on this site!! Hello, Ashkitten here for a review. Sometimes when people copy an idea, it seems forced because they are ...

    Apr 10, 2015


The illiterate of the 21st century will not be those who cannot read and write, but those who cannot learn, unlearn, and relearn.
— Alvin Toffler