Arion

Arion is a girl. I figured it was a girly enough name...but I could have been wrong.

Yeah, I think it would make a better story if it continued. Although, if you were to continue the only advice I would have is to make it seem more ...

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The other critiques have already taken care of chapter one, I'm going to start right off the bat, with the prologue. The first sentence was quite catching, very nice, I ...

Hah. I'm glad you enjoyed our squabble. It happes quite often, Arion is a control freak (speak for yourself). I was. ;) Anyways, Killing Butterflies...hmm...it's hard to place in any ...

First of all, just kidding, I know where I am :). But now that I've got you reading... I'm Arion. Well, I'm actually two Arion's...One as a character, one as ...