Ares

bloodstained body. Bodies can be bloodstianed? And then you used bloodstained again not too long after the first time. You should find a different word. She was in a grouchy ...

It seems like a pretty cool start. Simple enough to follow and pretty interesting. I wanna know why he's leaving though, so you might try to tell the reader that. ...

It seems like there should be something before this. But it was a pretty cool story, the only problem I have is how one man is strong enough to take ...

I kinda agree. The plot in the second was kinda...crappy.

It's an alright piece. Not much action or adventure but...it's alright. You could put some more length into it.

The flow/structure needs work. I like a lot of your word choice though.

When you’re down, When you’re lost, Think of me. [s]Think of [/s]what we had, And what we lost. What we almost were. Think of me, How I used to be. ...

Thanks everyone, Armadian, thanks for catching my typo, that line wasn't supposed to have the 'was' in it. Cadmium, I see what your saying, I kinda feel the same way. ...

I'd say go with your first essay idea. 'Cus it seems better. And then I don't really have any other things to recommend. I just thought maybe you'd like a ...

[s] The Gray Reign. The sky is a shadowed gray mass, Shifting quickly and quietly with the wind, And blocking all the warmth of God’s sunlight. It brings forth only ...

No problem. :wink: Once again, 8/10

Uhm 5/10. But you're my buddy so...8/10. You've had it for awhile. It's black an white. You shoulda used the monkey one I gave you a long time ago. =)

What's it about? One of my friends wanted to see it instead of 007 today but she was out voted by everybody else.

Uhm. Stop using all the same lines... And how do you laugh a laugh? That sounds weird. Dance a dance sounds funny too. This could be cool if you had ...

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