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It looks a little better Bobo. Nice job.

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"At about dawn, I was gunna empty a can of axe into the living room. It's a good thing you let me out." Axe is American spray cologne/deoderant

Paper. Cats or Dogs?

He was running through the underbrush. The wind was strong and unrelenting, [s]seemingly[/s] taking direction from the overbearing rain. Everything was wet, which made it virtually impossible for him

Just yelled DID :wink:

Ya'll excepting new characters?

It's cool... I need to write anyways, should probably do some of Falsehood. ^Doing Jordie's character sketch

Needs to come up with something for Falsehood. 8)

lol, world of squares... Anyways, The first stanza is a little awkward. Nice poem though.

Nice, I really enjoyed it. I especially liked some of the rhymes. The only thing I'd say is that if your gunna do the rhymes, make sure it always rhymes. ...

I read this at TSR and critiqued it there but I think you've revised it since then sooooo here ya go He moaned incoherently That was a little odd...also, the ...

Also, I like the characters you have going.

some forty-five paces above Change that in the beginning. Paces is an odd measuring unit the way you used it. ---------- And I think you should've stuck with 3rd person ...

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