Areida

Hi Sarah! I think you have potential here, but I never really see anything come of it in this piece. It starts awkwardly, continues in a disjointed way, and then ...

Hey, Jagged. I have to disagree with Navita; I liked this - a lot. I do agree with her, however, that you might reconsider your form. As a short story, ...

Hey Isha! I think I've recently reviewed some of your fiction, so I felt like I had to come check out your drawing! It's cool that you can do both; ...

I really like the drawing; the lines are clear and sharp, and the expression on his face looks great. My only complaint is the light blue outline around the figure ...

That's because 20+ers are old and decrepit. I don't know about the rest of y'all, but my arthritis is just a killer, spending all this time typing. :P

Hey Tariq! I'm with Snoink on this one; I feel like you're close to saying something, but you never quite come out and say it. Another thing that really destroyed ...

I agree with Navita! I like the complete ridiculous-ness of the whole thing; its absurdity is what makes it so loveable, but you could definitely up the ante with a ...

Hey Kamas! I'm pretty useless at critiquing poetry, but I really like the NaPoWriMo threads, so I figured I'd check out a few. :) I just read #24 and #25, ...

Hey kingolions! Not bad at all for a first effort, but try to rephrase so that you don't get trapped into using cliche's. "fall apart inside", "pain I feel inside," ...

Hey finishedmakingsense! This is really cool. I think the proportions of the legs and the torso and how it's turned and the angle of the head are all really great. ...

Hm. Interesting. I like what you're going for here, but there were a lot of places where I was confused about what was going on. I think vivid, more specific ...

Hi! I'm Areida. I'm 20. I go to college. It's not a very big college. My building where I live has six floors. I live on the third floor. I ...

Hi Jane! I like the start you have here. You don't have to apologize for being gross. Actually, you don't have to apologize for being vulgar or sentimental or sarcastic, ...

Hey Rhiannon! I didn't read your other story, but here are my thoughts on your prologue: The Yay's! - I like the idea you were going for in the first ...

So here's what I like: the speaker gets that they're being screwed over, but they still have feelings for this person. That's cool. It's frustrating when people are blind to ...