Ardor

Very good story. It has a nice flwo and pace to it. However, I wasn't so fond of the spacing at the end of the story- it seemed a bit ...

Awesome! You've improved the paragraph. That way new members can read it easier. That whole passage that you originally wrote works as a series of paragraphs. On a side note, ...

Thank you for your feedback Karzkin. Indeed my intention for this poem was to make it ambiguous in it's description, with an added minimalist feel. With the line "she never ...