AquaMarine

This thing is going again? :D Cool.

Hey there! Ok, so this is a lovely poem. You did wonderfully with the rhyme in most of it, which is unusual so I commend you for that. However, in ...

Hey Mage! Now, what I think this poem really needs is some deeper meaning behind it. That isn't to say that what you're writing about isn't deep, but I do ...

Hey there! I actually thought this was a pretty cute poem. My favourite stanza was: T 'was an robin's egg, So gently dappled, and palely blue, That there on the ...

Welcome, Howler! I think we talking in PM, right? But, anyway, I hope you're having a great time on YWS so far! ~Amy

Hey there! Firstly, you might want to call this something else. Maybe think of a great name for your poem or something? Now, some suggestions: My feelings are brittle. My ...

Hey there! Now, the first thing I need to point out is your rhyme scheme. It isn't working here. It feels forced and makes the lines that rhyme kind of ...

Hey there! Ok, so this was a little bland to read. This feels like you just tell us about it, without delving deeper into the meaning behind the poem. I ...

Hey there! Ok, so I'm not so much of a fan of haikus because they tend to leave out a lot of emotion in subjects which, to me, deserve more. ...

Hey Onyx! This is a lovely poem. Your style seems pretty sophisticated, so it's amazing that you haven't written much poetry! You're a lot better then me, anyway. But maybe ...

Hey there! One thing I think you should look out for in this poem are redundant words. For example: The small waves brush against the dock. The seagulls slowly drift ...

Hey there! So, this is the second of your poems I've run across. It doesn't disappoint at all. You've got this really great approach to the entire thing which makes ...

I kind of liked the rhyme scheme here. It worked with the sort of imperfect rhymes which make poems kind of quirky and cool. Nice one! I liked it, I ...

Hey there! So, this seems like a nice idea. A very nice idea. However, some of it isn't so great. What I think you need to work on is the ...

Hey Red! So, this is a nice little poem here. It's very seasonal! And pretty cool because it's snowing for me right now! :D One thing I would like to ...