AquaMarine

Oh, Hawkie, this is wonderful! You've used rhyme in this great way, it doesn't feel forced a t all so I really commend you for that. You've kept the emotion ...

Hey there! I like this. I'm just going to make some suggestions for how it could be improved. I'll take it line by line. What I'll mainly be looking at ...

Hey there! This was a nice poem. My favourite part, like Hope, is the first few lines. I think that after this the flow went kind of iffy. Your stanzas ...

Hey Dems! Wow, this is a really lovely poem. I'm a fan of the run-on sentence style (although I can by no means achieve it myself) and you have a ...

Gosh, Shina, you're beautiful! I absolutely adore your hair!

Hey Howler! This is nice! It's about luck and chance, right? You've picked a nice subject here, it's cool. One thing I would recommend is that maybe you could focus ...

Hey Flit! This is sort of a beautiful poem! It flowed seamlessly, which was a lovely thing to read. You have a great writing style, and it shows here. I ...

Hey there! I actually really liked this. Yes, it did seem like lyrics to me, but that's just me. I could really imagine someone singing that. It flows throughout really ...

I agree with Hope about the slight forced rhyme and the cliché. You have a nice style, but that's really all this poem seems to me: nice. It's not an ...

Hey there! I really like the simplicity of this. You pull of the short lines and rhyme scheme quite well. It adds to the feel of the poem, and creates ...

Hey there! This is going to be a short review because I don't have much time. This is a lovely analogy. I'm a big fan of Autumn myself, so I ...

Hey there! Ok, so as people have said this is some pretty nice imagery you've got running through your poem. Very nice indeed. I would quite like to see some ...

Hey there! So, I really liked this poem! Like Snoink said, it doesn't exactly fit with any creation stories that I know, so I'm not sure if this poem is ...

Hey there! So, my problem here is that you've attempted to put a rather large subject of a poem, complete with question and all, into a very small poetic format. ...

Hey there! You have quite a nice rhyme scheme, here. It's not too forced. It's kind of simple, actually, but that works with what you're doing. The rhyme, for me, ...