AquaMarine

Hey there! So, I think that here you're just talking about what you want to do. You make no mention of why, of how, of anything else. This makes the ...

I really liked this! It's different, and it's lovely. Your rhyme scheme works so well. It's not forced, and it really brings your poem to life as it's read through. ...

Hey there! My favourite line would actually be the one referring to gravity. It's a nice image, there, and one that I really like. I think it would be really ...

Hey Sarah! How're you doing? I think that you have a nice idea here, and I actually like the shortness of the poem. Sometimes they drag on, which isn't actually ...

Hey there! Despite the whole sadness and dark side of the poem, I did enjoy it. Your rhyme scheme is kind of flawless, which is nice, and the rhythm impeccable. ...

Hey there! I like this because it is a personal poem. It's not something generic, not really. You've put yourself into this poem, you've put things that mean something to ...

Haha, this is a lovely idea! When I saw the title I assumed it was going to be something whiny about the joys of childhood, but no, it's actually quite ...

I actually really enjoyed this! It's dealing with an idea that has been dealt with before, but the language you use is wonderful, as is your writing style. Another thing ...

Hey there! I liked this! It really evokes memories of, well, swinging on swings in childhood! It's quite lovely. One thing I would point out is your ending. You suddenly, ...

Hey there! Now, my suggestion to you here is that you really get across the message that you're meaning to. I sense that something happened between the narrator and their ...

Hey Rachel! Now, the problem with this is that it doesn't really give the reader (that's me!) any MEAT. You've got the basics of the poem here, sure; you've got ...

Hey there! I think that, in this poem, you've told us everything rather than shown us everything. One example would be: It was all just an illusion Something that was ...

Hey there! This was a very original poem! I absolutely loved it. :D I do think that you could, perhaps, make the subject (as Snoink said) slightly clearer throughout the ...

Hey there! Now, one thing I think would be really nice is if you expanded on a couple of lines. The most obvious you be: 'The beautiful night sky fills ...

Hey there! I liked this poem. As people have said, it's kind of simple but lovely and sweet which makes a very nice read. The flow could definitely be improved: ...