AquaMarine

Hey Timmy! Inhave to agree with Icicle in that I didn't know the riders you were talking about were ghosts until you explained that. Why not either add a new ...

Hey there! So, I really liked this piece. Your rhyme scheme isn't too bad at all; it definitely isn't that forced which is a lovely thing to see. Your rhythm ...

Hey there! I just want to say that it's really great of you to have picked this subject. I know people close to me have suffered from it, and it's ...

Hey there! This is nice, I really enjoyed it! Your description is beautiful, and you write in a lovely style. The rhythm was odd in occasions, but other people have ...

Hey there! I loved this. My favourite parts were most of the parts in italic, they were kind of beautiful. I don't know whether this'll sound strange, as I've spent ...

Hey there! Well, I'm basically repeating what others have said, but I think you need to deliver this better. At the moment, with the rhyme scheme and lack of poetic ...

Haha, Jiggs, this is awesome. As Van said, epic! :D I'm not actually going to be constructive here, because this doesn't need it. The end made me laugh a lot, ...

Hey there! Hmm. I quite like the whole visual effects thing. At the same time, I do think that the poem should be able to be effective without visual aids. ...

Hey there! I ... think I like this. I'm not really sure. It's kind of cool, the way that it doesn't make sense, but at the same time I'm kind ...

Welcome to YWS! I hope you have a great time here. If you need anything, just PM me! :D

Hey there! As Hope said, you use a mixture of old and modern English. To me, the language in the poem is kind of scattered, and not very well used. ...

Aqua ~ lovely face, are you European? Haha, thank you. Yes, I'm English. :D

Hey there! Gosh, this is lovely. The imagery used and the way it's all written is really beautiful. I've reviewed A LOT of poetry in the last few days, but ...

Hey there! This is kind of good. I think that you need to work on a few things. Firstly would be the emotion in the poem. I can tell that ...

I love the idea of more short stories. The separate forum idea seems great too, although sometimes I find it kind of hard to categorise short stories. Generally most of ...