AquaMarine

This is a tentative entry for Rosey's contest: The Beginning of Magic. Er, yeah. I think the ending needs a little reworking, so opinions on that would be nice. Other ...

**Sorry if this isn't great, but Reet is fun to write now! :D ** Reet leant against the till of the bookshop, tapping out a complicated tune on the surface. ...

I need to edit my character on the spreadsheet, and then I'll post in a bit.

I don't have an idea about the school thing - although I've posted stories that have been assignments for school on YWS. But that might just be because my school ...

Lol, wow! Number 200, baby!

13! Only four more less than I'd hoped. But, in my defence, it was sunny. And it was so nice I had to go for a cycle ride. Ah well. ...

Hello! To me, this poem feels very lacking at the moment. It's got the basic idea down, but there is a lot ore that needs to be added before it's ...

Hello! This poem feels very raw, which means that the emotion comes off it very strongly. Whilst in some cases this is a very good thing, I think here you ...

Hello! Well, everyone has pointed out the structure of this poem! Personally, I think it would be much better if it flowed in a more legato way because I think ...

Hello! I really liked the majority of this poem. You tell it with the air of a storyteller, yet with the rhythm of a poet, which means it all ties ...

5, so far. Luckily now everyone is watching the England match so I have time to review. :D

Hello! Now, what I immediately noticed in the first stanza was that you have rather a lot of questions! So, once you've asked those questions in the poem, why don't ...

Hey Jas! I don't think I've really read much of your poetry before, but the style of it really intrigued me. It was lovely. The beginning, for me, was the ...

Hello! For me, although I agree with what people are saying about cliche-ness, it's not the subject of the poem that really bothers me, it's the way you execute that. ...

Hello! At times, this poem felt much too prose-like for me. That might be because I'm not such a fan of poems written in this style - I feel like ...