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Re: Say My Name
Hello! Nice, I love poems written from the PoV of an animal, always interesting to read. It fills me with schadenfreude! One thing that would improve this poem is really ...
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Re: Reviews, glorious reviews!
Done, El! Hope I helped. :)
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Re: Into the Depths. 1
Hey Ellie! In the unearthly hours of the morning, when dawn was still hours from breaking, Madeleine Grey awoke to indistinct noises coming from the ground floor. Almost instantly after ...
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Re: Saying Something About Love
Hello! One thing I really loved about this poem was the similes you used - they were brilliant. Very original, easy to relate to - it was them that set ...
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Re: scars and stripes
Hi there! Wow, powerful poem. A different take, which I like. One thing that bugged me here was the way the poem lurched around a little - your transitions weren't ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: When I was young
Hello! A lot of rhyming poems I review would tend to work better without rhyme, but I genuinely think it works here! Your overall tone was a very cutesy one, ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: The Review Day Check-In Thread
8 so far! I'll try for a few more when I come back from a run. :)
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Re: Random Thoughts
Hey there! This was a really nice poem, which at the end took a turn that both surprised me and finished the poem off nicely. I do think that, at ...
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Re: My Crush Ate My Homework
Hello! Haha, absolutely wonderful. I wasn't sure what I was expecting, but I wasn't expecting it to genuinely make me laugh. One thing I really liked was the fact that ...
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Re: Meaning of a Username (Musings about 'silent' pages)
This makes my username seem inordinately shallow. I chose it because it sounded nice and I like the colour blue. xD I opened this expecting something ... well, not that ...
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Re: Lost Again
Hello! It's quite refreshing for a poem to be simple, but however refreshing it is then sometimes simplicity means that you may not convey the right amount of emotion. The ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: Outside the Box
Hello! I think that the overall theme and idea of this poem actually outshines the execution. You started with a good theme to write about, but I don't think you've ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: On a clear winter night.
:D Hello, Hopeh. The actual length of this piece isn't really the problem for me here, it's actually the lack of development in some places. What you've written is really ...
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Re: Reviews, glorious reviews!
Finished Roal and Ben. Now, it's Review Sunday, so does anyone have any requests? :)
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Re: *deleted*
Hi there! The boy exited his vehicle as he walked toward the house. He opened the house’s mailbox and placed the letters in. He stared at the box’s gold plate ...
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