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I like Ivory Fangs and Blue Razors. :D

Gabriel "Gabby" Patterson: Joining their gang… When the Sayers had kicked me out and broke my arm I had sworn that I would never get involved with gangs again. From ...

Hey Skinsy, Another great post. Again I feel very useless because as usual instead of feeding me steak, you give me the Eiffel Tower. See what I did there? A ...

There is too much dialouge here. Way to much. Actually, that's practically all this chapter is. This is not what you want. You want a reader to get an idea ...

I think Gabby is now in the troupe with Noah and your MC Justagirl. :D When he says he'll do anything then that even means joining the group. *Eyebrow wiggle* ...

Gabriel "Gabby" Patterson: "I thought it would look good with my dress for the king's bloody ballroom party!" I snapped, the pain becoming unbearable. Why were they asking me stupid ...

Thought I'd mention that Talia Jones is Beyonce's descendant. Gabriel loves her like Ranger Hawk does Lorgan Lerman. Which means: a lot! Also, sorry for the very long post. Gabriel ...

We've got this thing started! WHOOP! So, what are we going to call our gang when it all joins together?

Gabriel "Gabby" Patterson: "I'm all alone, no one here beside me!" Reaching my good hand inside of a broken window of a small car, I grabbed at a half full ...

Apple here, rearing to review! Wow Cspr, I never realised you were such a good writer. Oh dang, I don't want to sound rude but this is great! Your emotion, ...

Alright, change the title, it does nothing for you. Now I don't mean to be rude but when I started reading I got a surprise because what I initially thought ...

Hey, Apple here. Firstly I am going to point out just how much I love your title and the plot of this. I was interested straight away and I even ...

Over here it's Saturday but I am guessing it's still Friday in the US. T.T Times zones, they drive me insane.

No your idea was helpful also, trust me. Thank you everyone for giving me suggestions, already I find it easier to write and when I re-read it, I found it ...

Hmm, you have some awesome names working right there but I think I have some suggestions. Pondering. Pondering. Pondering. Thinking. Thinking. *This happens for a while* Mundane could be a ...