AntonioC

I like how you had a sudden transition from them being rich to being pheasants. The story was really good and written really well. However, you had a typo where ...

I like the overall story, though you did have some problems. You made some punctuation errors in your story. You also made some capitalization mistakes. I wonder if you could ...

I like how descriptive you were when telling the story. I also like how well you were writing in the 1st person. You did good making it sound more like ...