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Inglorious Innocence It began in Eden, a place like no other. Eden was a place where perfection and excellence existed naturally. In Eden extreme measures were taken to maintain the ...

I really like the atmosphere of this picture, you know, the fog and all that. I´d just wish it would be a bit...damn..I´m not shure this is the rigth word..well: ...

Joseph von Eichendorff - Mondnacht (Night of the moon) Es war, als hätt' der Himmel Die Erde still geküsst Dass sie im Blütenschimmer Von ihm nun träumen müsst Die Luft ...

okay. umm. I really like the last sentence, makes me think about it. The only thing, which you could do better is the form, if you know what I mean. ...

Hey there, so..I´m new and well...I suppose I´ll introduce myself a little bit now: I´m 17 years old, I´m coming from Germany and I never wrote a story or poem ...

Please be as hash as possible when criticising this piece, I need as much feed back as possible to make it better than it is currently. Prophecy. When Adam's blood ...

Hi, This is great, you should definitely espand on it, it would make a great book. On my part I'm dying to find out what happens next, like who wins ...

Hi, This is a great piece, but I think you could expand it a bit more. It raises many questions that are left unanswered. However, with a bit of work, ...

I noticed just the one spelling error 'rumors' which you only missed out the 'u', so it should be rumours. Apart from that I didn't notice any other mistakes, or ...

off, of me - I would probably just use 'off me', maybe? and jumped up in one swift movement grabbing my dressing gown and wrapped it around me - I ...

general errors Passerby, should be passer-by or passer by satans, should have an apostrophe satan's favor, needs a 'u' favour paneling, should have double 'l' panelling This is just me, ...

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Hi, This is a good passage but Ithink that you might need to work on it a bit more. There are really nice descriptions, but the different ideas are kind ...

My name is Leila and for the last two months I have been in a coma. How do I know? I watch my lifeless form, from the seat next to ...

First, Spelling errors Thats - That's (since I presume it is meant to be 'that is') Triger - Trigger elses - else's trough - through screwd - screwed Next, I ...