Anonymous-A

Not bad, not bad at all. I like the way that at each ending there is a good cliffhanger that is neither stupid nor over-exaggerated. Your characters, even the short-lived, ...

I guess it was a good, simple story. But even if it was just for an English project- expand! If you put your story in the section for action and ...

I am really enjoying your story. Your plot isn't retarded and neither are your characters (which is pretty rare to find). The only thing that would help is to make ...

Hmmm...this guys responding just about the same way a friend of mine would. The only problem? My friend is a girl. I know that in the passage he claims that ...

Overall, I thought that this was a very nice story and i hope that you would make it continuous. No, no, wait. You have to make this continuous, or else ...