Anijumper

I'm not the biggest fan of short stories, but you tied this one up nicely. The children of the town saw her as The Wicked Witch like in the stories ...

Although at first it sounds like this idea is a cliche, if you make her learning/transition process unique this could be good. The only thing I worry about is that ...

Intriguing. This is the type of story that's the most fun to review because you feel compelled to keep reading it! Your story is full of great description, and you've ...

I agree about your spacing. A new paragraph should begin each time someone speaks. I'd recommend reading this out loud to yourself or someone else so you can see where ...

This is definitely an interesting idea that's just begging for a chapter two. :wink: First of all I think that you could add some description of the high school itself ...

I loved this book. It dealt with some heavy stuff, but the author did it extremely well. It also has a bit of a theme of holding on to the ...

Simple actions are a problem. I know it sounds weird, but things like opening doors, moving from location to location (usually short distances, like from a room to the car), ...

D uring the final step of the process, what kind of valedictorian fell asleep on their graduation day? Capitalization And how dare she be even the least bit interested in ...

She needed a hot shower, but since her dad was probably using it, she'd settle for a book. If you make this one whole sentence instead of two separate ones, ...

Hey everyone! My username is Anijumper, but you can call me Ani if you like or you think Anijumper is too long, I guess. I love to read and write. ...