Anijumper

"My God James , What are you thinking?", the commander and chief of the United States almost screamed into the speaker phone in his office."You are really going to go ...

Alright, so this beginning is a little awkward. I can't figure out why she's looking for everyone and then she just leaves (I'm assuming she's leaving for school). There doesn't ...

I think this is good as it is, seeing as it is only a preface. It's best to leave the preface short anyway, without being too vague. I think you've ...

This story is my kind of crazy. ;) (I mean this in a good way, I promise). I'd love to read more of it when you write it (because you ...

Sometime’s there’s no warning. Nothing at all. This doesn't quite make sense. I would try "None at all." Need some apostrophes: water ' s heartbeat heaven ' s longer.. Either ...

This was interesting to read. I especially loved how you made your MC have such conflicted emotions. That's very human and something that everyone can relate to, even if they ...

Sport Grunt Palin. Well, that's just about the weirdest middle name I've ever heard. I may also be the first girl named Sport. :roll:

I really did like Wuthering Heights. I found Joseph's accent incredibly annoying, however. It was very dark and tragic, but it definitely made you feel something. I actually preferred Jane ...

Well, essentially there's three. There's the one I've been developing for years in my head, that I've put on hold. Then there's another that wasn't fully developed and lacked research ...

Well, I was planning on doing it, but this year is going to be pretty crazy, plus I recently started a new idea that I'm really excited about. It's going ...

Weather doesn't really affect me that much (it mostly rains here anyway...). Temperature, however, is bothersome. My room is always the coldest/hottest in the house. I can write when it's ...

Usually in the position that's worst for my neck. :roll: I write in several different notebooks, especially story ideas. If I don't actually have a scene or something, then it's ...

Frankly, you have me pretty crazy about your characters too! I love the sound of them, and now I really want to read this book-to-be. So my advice: One thing ...

Ahh, that shapeshifter thing was so dumb! BELLA: They're not werewolves?! They're shapeshifters?! EDWARD: Yes. I've known this for 20,000 pages but didn't think it was important enough to bring ...

Overall I thought this was good. Just a few things to fix: Now we’re back to where we started. In my mom’s truck going towards my inevitable doom, Alva Oklahoma. ...