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Re: Without Me
The only way to know, If you're living life the proper way, Is to close your eyes at night, And want them to open the next day. I'm not a ...
Nov 30, 2011 -
Re: I'm A Jesus Freak
Creativityrules, Nice one! The poem was clearly heartfelt and genuine, and I like that in a poem. I do have a few minor quarrels, however. I thought at times the ...
Nov 29, 2011 -
Re: Past, Present, Future.
The past is but regret-filled chapter, In my own autobiography. A guilty, unwanted, forgotten blur, Whose happy, smiling face escapes me. But living in my past, Will only make the ...
Nov 24, 2011 -
Re: Baby? Please, Help Me?
BrokenSkye, A few issues I have to raise with this poem. First of all, punctuation can go a long way. At the moment, you have rare capitals at the beginning ...
Nov 24, 2011 -
Re: Thunderstorms at home
Mirasol, Nice poem! I thought the rhyming scheme could be great at times, and you perfectly described a thunderstorm in my view. However, in every stanza, I found the last ...
Nov 19, 2011 -
Re: Stars that shine forever and ever.
Thanks for the reviews guys, I added in another paragraph to try and make it more original. What do you think?
Nov 18, 2011 -
Re: Stars that shine forever and ever.
Her name is Lucy, just by the way. You are what you are - A bright and important night's star. Beautiful as can be, And when I look up as ...
Nov 17, 2011 -
Re: Blowing Flames
GeeLyria Wow, way to make me sad. Great, amazing, fantastic poem, but really could you please make the next one not so sad ? haha, just kidding, it's really amazing. ...
Nov 17, 2011 -
Re: Crossing the Railroad Tracks
Not a clue about the meaning mate, is the persona commiting suicide? Great poem even if I don't get it on my quick read, sorry about the rushed response. Great ...
Nov 17, 2011 -
Re: How close we used to be.
When you're alone, Do you think of me? And how close, We used the be? Because when you're with them, There's not a chance, I know. You're too busy being ...
Nov 16, 2011 -
Re: A 'connected' society
The phones shout, And the headphones blare. The keyboards moan, And at their iPads they stare. Their faces lit up, As their laptops beep and ping. A world that is ...
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: The Pain of the Cold and Darkness
Snickerdooly, That's great! Amazing poem, really really well written. The last stanza is just phenomenal, really. I love how you've invented this way of dealing with the pain of the ...
Nov 14, 2011 -
Re: Hazel
RWMcKinleys, I like it, I really do. You did well to express your emotions and your feelings in this piece. I felt that the story really flowed, and it was ...
Nov 14, 2011 -
Re: No-Shave November
I feel your pain, the beard has managed to evade me - but don't get too stressed, you've still got 16 days to turn into a werewolf-like-creature. To the poem ...
Nov 14, 2011 -
Re: Strangers
Talkingbird, Great work! I thought that was a very nice and impressive poem, well done. I thought the character of the stranger was described excellently, as they really don't seem ...
Nov 14, 2011
