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Re: Too Late
Hey Ofir, *waves* I held on to my pillow with everything I had. Everything you had? What? Rephrase. Perhaps you mean 'I held onto my pillow in desperation' It felt ...
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Re: Attendant of God
My angel calls- Announces her being, Imposes her will, Levels me down I like this, especially for the first stanza, I thought it was great. The line 'Announces her being,' ...
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Re: Pain
In life pain is the promise of tomorrow But it is today that oneself can prepare One will suffer the lesser of the sorrow It shall be the one that ...
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Re: Tribal DT
-Name: Dahlia Delacroix -Age: 125 (Looks like a child.) -Gender: Female -Spirit: Dark Spirit -City: Sky. -Personality: Dahlia has a very dark and gloomy personality, she is the girl next ...
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Re: Letters to You
“Letters to You” I woke up in the morning I dont like this, It makes the poem a bit awkward. Perhaps if you said, 'I woke up this morning' or ...
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Re: The Lost Heir
Kris. I couldn't sleep. I was also bored, boored, oh so incredibly bored. What exactly was one meant to do for fun in this part of the woods, I was ...
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Re: [In]Sane
Memories are sneaking up on me, Of a time when I was young, And in love, Of I a time when I was whole. After a comma the next letter ...
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Re: I'm Trying
This poem was one that I could really relate to and so it made it mean a whole lot more to me. It was really well-written, and you didn't use ...
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Re: My Spot For You
I feel as if you watch over me, but I know you can't talk back, so here I am trying, to be here for you. I like this first stanza, ...
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Re: Let The Hell Begin
Hey Emaly :D The earth splits, and terror strikes. Screams echo through, A once silent night. The pits of hell, Emerge and fright. Emerge and fright? That makes no sense ...
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Re: Monsters
I really enjoyed reading this, for someone who doesn't really write poetry this is great. They creep up closer, as they try to harm me. But I shut my eyes, ...
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Re: "Roller-Coaster" (A Dynamite by Taio Cruz PARODY)
I really liked this. It made me smile, I dont know how to review parodies so I'm just going to leave it at that. Keep Writing Anger :D
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Re: Growing Up
Young as we are, older we journey so far Cuddling like a teddy bear, sooner we fear to stare What is going on here? This makes no sense. Brittle like ...
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Re: Fire Dimensions-Prologue
Hey Ish, Tonight was the night that ever every Fatua in the kingdom met, sang out for all of Lasverna to hear. Only spelling mistake I could find, I couldn't ...
Aug 4, 2010
