Angela

I thought this was a good story. Not excellent, but I've read worse. I think that the only thing that needs more developing is your voice. A very good idea, ...

Sounds really good so far. I can't tell at all that you a beginner at this type of writing. Just a few quick things: "The snake was the sliest of ...

So good, I almost started crying. There were just a few minor spelling errors that I caught. Such a touching story! 1. "I hesitated for a second, then went in ...

Hey! I thought this story was pretty good. Definitely grabbed my attention. Since I'm kinda new here, this might not quite be formatted the best. Just a warning. I noticed ...